Talk:Paul London/GA1

GA Review

Just glancing at the lead, it feels far too short. That said, taking a closer glance I can't think of much to add. Perhaps a mention of personal life?

I expanded it a little. There's not much to add about his personal life, but it mentions his former girlfriend. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 19:55, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"He made his debut in the independent circuit on 7 April 2000, competing in promotions throughout Texas." - his debut involved him competing in multiple promotions on the one day? Reword, I think.
- Done--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:18, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"London made his debut in Ring of Honor (ROH)" - he went from studying at Texas Uni to appearing on ROH? There must be something in between (how'd they choose him (or however it works))?

While studying, he was constantly competing on the Independent circuit, which id mentioned in the early career section. Nonetheless, I added a quick mention on it in that section too. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 20:06, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

which led to both London and Shane brawling" - brawling implies them fighting against each other?If so remove the "both". If not, then I have no idea what it's saying...
- Done--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:18, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"London competed in ZERO1 for several months, beginning in January 2003, before turning down a contract." - a bit confusing; wouldn't he have needed a contract to compete in the first place?
- In the universe of pro wrestling, wrestlers can compete for promotions in dark matches (or try-outs) without contracts. I read the source, it stated that Zero-one is a japan promotion, and japanese promotions call wrestlers from North America to wrestle for their promotion without a contract, so when he wrestled a couple of shows, they were impressed and offered him a contract, which he turned down.--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"On 2 February 2007, London and Kendrick suffered a non-title loss to the rookie team Deuce 'n Domino.[58] In a title rematch at No Way Out, however, London and Kendrick retained the championship - sounds awkward to name them twice in two sentences... perhaps reword to "however, they regained..." or something like that?
- Fixed.--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Are the following sources reliable:
- http://www.gerweck.net/paullondon.htm
  - Gerweck is not reliable per FA criteria, but it is used in other GA's and no problem was encountered. --SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Replaced with SLAM! Wrestling. GaryColemanFan (talk) 20:30, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - GA/FA criteria for sources should be the same thing; WP:V. Thanks GCF. —Giggy 08:25, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- http://blogzarro.com/?p=184
  - It seems like a blog site, but It doesn't seem like anyone can edit it, only established personnel. So it seems okay. Plus it is a Q&A.
    - WP:SPS - is there any way of confirming that "James A." is reliable and didn't (say) make up the entire thing? That's the main issue. —Giggy 08:25, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well, the reference is used to say that he worked at Urban Outfitters and that his brother is a music video director. Could we leave that info out? I can replace the brother one with this if it's considered reliable. Also, on a side note, is this reliable? It mentions how he began working for TNA in it. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 15:16, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The 411mania site should be fine per this. Not so sure about the other one but I'll let it go as it's probably only a minor deal. Passing now, —Giggy 00:07, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- http://www.usenet.com/newsgroups/rec.sport.pro-wrestling.info/msg00177.html (that one needs its date wlinked in the ref if it is reliable, though I don't think newsgroups usually are...)
  - Well it's just reprinting an article that WWE.com published, but then removed. I also date the ref.--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

As SRX said, the source is an exact replica of a WWE.com article, but the link to it is dead. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 20:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Any why is there a references section with duplicate info to the footnotes section?
- I have no idea why? But I fixed it.--SRX^--^Latino Heat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it - please leave me a talk page note when done. Cheers, —Giggy 08:19, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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